The Mark of the Beast

Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers…each week we are given a photo and allotted only 175 words to construct a story.  Below is my response to this week’s “Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers” 


The Mark Of The Beast

She watched him from her place of containment.  Sure enough, he had “the mark” and so she fled her confines to mingle amongst the merry crowd.

She felt his stare.  Knowing this to be her cue, she covered the ten steps, separating them and asked with a timid voice, “Care to dance, handsome?”

As usual, the stranger’s eyes filled with suspicion, but once he saw her shy smile, he tossed doubt away, and  accepted her soft hand.  In an instant their bodies melded and he was consumed with unquenchable lust.  He wanted her, but the intense craving terrified him. Sensing his resolve, she crushed him closer and huskily growled, “My poor…poor beast..not used to being controlled…”

Slowly she pulled away…but only enough for him to look into her black eyes.  In them, he saw the innocents he had raped and they were coming for him. Terror squeezed his heart until it burst.

She dropped the corpse and then faded into the picture hanging on the wall.  The caption underneath read, “Angel of Death”

(Word count 175)

Photo by Etol Bagam










20 Comments Add yours

  1. Wow! Great spin to prompt. I loved it! I loved that she made him see all the innocents he had raped, and that his judgement was coming. Wonderful story!

    1. Thank you so much! 🙂

      1. I REALLY enjoyed your story!

  2. mandibelle16 says:

    Very much enjoyed this story. You never suspected that she was the real danger and not the guy she saw come into the bar. He was a horrible guy and did his own thing but it doesn’t mean he is not subject to death like the rest of it. And some kind of judgement I presume. . . Really great writing. Exciting!

    1. Thank you for your kind words. I love it when there’s cosmic justice in the world. 😉

  3. maria says:

    WOW! This is really great. Clever take to the prompt! 😀

  4. draliman says:

    Great story! Wouldn’t it be cool if it there really were someone surgically removing such nasty people? That guy definitely got what was coming to him.

  5. plotless1 says:

    That black eyed, conniving, scheming, devil.

  6. jademwong says:

    Oh my gosh, I love this! Definitely one of my faves from all the prompt submissions I’ve read so far. So creative and I love that you used the painting! Very well written.

    1. Thank you so much! 🙂

  7. Ellespeth says:

    Ohhhh! Great story. Spooky-real.

    1. Thank you… absolutely love spooky! 🙂

  8. Really enjoyed this story.
    The title is awesome too.

    1. Thank you so much! 🙂

  9. Alixa says:

    What a dark twist! Loved it 🙂

  10. Martin Flux says:

    Initially I thought this was going somewhere else, but the story has taken me into some dark and spooky places. Well done!

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